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    Who You Were....


    Trying these out to see how they would look on a card, and it looks like I may have to put text to the left to see the words in the first and have to play with the second. Will post edited versions at another time.


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    Who You Were

    If I drink you....will I float in blissful intoxication?

    If I want you....will you satisfy my craving for you?

    If I dream of you...will our silhouettes dance majestic shadows?

    If I say your name....will you come to me willingly?

    If I dine on you....will you taste of honey and myrrh?

    If I look for you....will you leave tracks in the sand?

    If I think of you....will you imagine feeling my lips to yours?

    If I touch you....will you let go of what was, and let me make love to you now?

    If I love you...will you accept my invitation for better or for worse?

    If....only I knew....who you were....

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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I like #2 The best for layout PD ....... but I think the poem goes best with picture #1


    Posted By Mysty | Jul 24, 2007
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    Thanks Mysty and I agree 1000%. I will try to work this up, having trouble with the bright spots on the girl with glitter roses in left, center and right alignment, lol. Maybe I will zigzag. Thank you so much for taking time to view and to comment. :hug:

    Kim :)

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Kim,

    the truth of the saga lies in the line
    better is easy....it is finding the one who will love us at our worst. Great write!

    Jerry

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    For layout I like #1 too, it's a pretty picture.
    The poem is beautiful and I can relate.
    Very well done Kim :)


    Posted By Moonchild | Jul 24, 2007
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    Ahhhhhh! I love this...if only I knew where you were...I would capture you...
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Thanks Jerry, Karen, and Danette for taking precious time to view and to comment.

    Jerry....you said..."it is finding the one who will love us at our worst. Great write!" and you are sooo right.

    Thank you soooo much Karen, and am glad you enjoyed.

    Danette, ahhhh I love that line...and should be the last ending line...beautiful

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    On the green tinted one.. what if you change the font color to a midnight blue? You'd be able to see it better and it was give u the feeling you were looking into the midnight gaze over the water..
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Hi Apryl, it is a possibility, will check it out and thanks for stoppin by.

    Kim :)
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    aaaahh breath-taking again! The pic of #1 is absolutely perfect...the white type and #2 goes best together I think, tho. These daunting questions, relentlessly resounding in our heads, makes my heart bleed a little at the possibilities ahead for us to find that perfect someone (well some of us have to still look! haha!) but darn it, woman...U ROCK!!

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    Hey now PD,

    Another great write, it's not too much and, well actually, it's just enough to make one want to keep reading. I luved your choice of wording and I'm kinda leaning towards #1 also, nice pic, nice write. Thanx for the read. T


    Posted By lasher | Jul 30, 2007
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    Thank you all for reading and commenting. Seems like #1 is turning out to be there winner. appreciate all who took time to offer your opinion. Love ya!

    Kim :)

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