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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Who are you?
    Standing out there naked in the rain,
    bleeding heart, life full of pain.
    Who are you,
    who chose to be,
    downtrodden, and not carefree?
    Who are you,
    who rises each morning,
    complaining that life is just not fair?
    Who would never think to dare,
    break out of the mold, or
    go for your own pot of gold...
    travel rough rivers and dangerous jungles.
    Instead...
    you seek solace
    fleeting understanding.
    Desperation claims you,
    like a black hole yawning.
    Open your eyes and heart
    see the cloud clearing!
    Who are you,
    who looks at me,
    with sidelong glance
    full of bitter envy?
    Hate for who I am,
    who you'd like to be.
    Who are you?

    nomadicrhymer

    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    wow! gotta love this... speaks volumes, hits home, makes ya think... i know people like this... slip into phases of being one once in a while.. yeah, lots is said in this piece.. love it!

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Mar 14, 2007
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    Felt as if ' needed
    a bath after reading
    this write...

    just to wash off the
    negativeness the
    void of tomorrows.

    Pitty for anybody
    that has a life
    sucker of that sort

    near them.

    Thanks for the
    read.


    Posted By Jeez | Mar 15, 2007
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    Sealiah Poetic Dancer

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    AMAZING!!! Honestly Nomad, this was wonderful. I want to print it out and give it to my coworkers... but they'd take it exactly as it's meant! Ha ha!

    Anyways, brava to you chica!


    Posted By Sealiah | Mar 15, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hey Serenity, thanks for reading...am sure you don't slip that far! :girlhide: :whip:

    Jeez, wow! sorry! didn't mean to make you feel like that! :huggles:
    Felt as if ' needed
    a bath after reading
    this write..
    .

    Sealiah...don't you dare, that was SO funny! ha!...darn, you would probably get beat up on a dark night in the wilds of Idaho...ARE there wilds in Idaho? :acute:

    Thanks all for the great reviews on this very negative piece!!

    Nomad

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    This is a work of sheer emotion! Wow is all I can say!:yayjpic: :whoops: :blowup:


    Posted By lanaia74 | Mar 17, 2007
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    a black hole yawning awesome you should be proud of that
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Nomad,

    This was a very real write, and am sure many, many people can relate to, and have experienced. The part that is also so very real that you scribe is that it is a choice. People choose to be, feel, act, or react this way; even the envy. Sometimes ii is just easier for people to be this way, and I feel sad for those who choose to be mean, and like it. My heart out to anyone who's situation is so bleak or horrific even, that life's light doesn't reach. I welcome those and help those who may change or need a little push to the light. I pity envious emotions as they are a waste of energy, as there is beauty to be found in things of God. This is a wonderful write and thank you for sharing.

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hello and thanks much for reading and commenting, lanaia74, Erik, and Painted!! I appreciate your taking the time...very much.

    PD glad to see you back in the swing of things :yay: Yes, it is a total waste of energy and emotion envying, yet I feel that it is somehow a part of humanity, but a part that we must, like other bad impulses, rid ourselves of...because I think for some it is almost an automatic reaction. :boohoo:

    Nomad

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    Excellent poem.
    The ending is a gem.

    Many thanks. I cannot write more as "criticism" is not allowed in these pages, the rules say.
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks for the review, Nikos!! :yay:
    Feel free to criticize my poetry anytime...I will NOT get offended, I promise... :dance:

    Many thanks again!

    Nomad
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    WOW Nomad ..... Well said ...... awesome Write. I must save this one as a favorite.

    ~Mysty~


    Posted By Mysty | Apr 15, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks for reviewing, Mysty!! Glad you enjoyed this piece...:cheers:

    Nomad

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