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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Who’s there?
    waiting…
    in your hearts’ mind
    undulating softly
    as if in limbo
    for you…waiting
    take a look
    and see
    really see
    not with the eyes
    that sometimes lie
    not with the heart
    that doesn’t know
    what it really wants
    but with the soul
    Oh, beautiful soul!
    Seeker of love…
    and lasting belonging
    conveyor of peace
    and new beginnings
    true togetherness
    was meant as the
    welding of a Forever.
    Who’s there…
    waiting for you?
    you cannot see
    with eyes so jaded
    your heart won’t feel
    cause it’s too complicated
    filled with lies
    fed into you
    by a society
    blundering through destruction
    faster than the soul can weep
    it’s lost…waiting…just for…you!

    © nomadicrhymer

    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    I thought this was going to be one of them Knock Knock Jokes (title), but naw you getting good at this!
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Ms Nomad,

    :wow: Just wow! What a weave of emotion in this piece! I could not read it just once. Totally captivating and message ever so strong. It moved me and I am sure many can relate to this! The title is most fitting and the structure, your unique style, content, and affect...simply flawless and I was all yours from beginning to end, hanging on to every word...every line! Tis wonderful to read your poetry again, and I missed it. A force to reckon with you are...This is memorable Ms Nomad, and one of your best. Keep'm coming!

    Kim :)

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    Oh, I really did enjoy this poem a whole lot! I like the format that you used for it and how you created the stanzas, it made a nice rhythm to me and I felt like each line kind of flowed into the next. I like how you mention the heart but say that the heart cannot fully decide what it wants because it's too confused and doesn't quite understand what it wants... yet, the soul can decide. I've never thought of that before but it's a unique and very interesting perspective. I've always found the heart (or at least, with my heart) to not know what it wants and to be confused by so many different things and easily fooled... but I feel like the essence of my soul truly does know what I desire better than the heart.

    Some of my favorite lines in the poem was this below:

    you cannot see
    with eyes so jaded
    your heart won’t feel
    cause it’s too complicated
    filled with lies
    fed into you
    by a society
    blundering through destruction


    So, I found this to be a very thought provoking poem and I definitely enjoyed reading it. I liked how you ended it and I think that you overall did a great job with it. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing away!


    Posted By SarahNSH | May 8, 2008
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    CJ, PD and Sarah: thank you guys SO much for your wonderful reviews. I am so delighted that you enjoyed this piece. Thanks again!

    Nomad

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    i love the flow, its very smooth and your word choice is not only eye catching but interesting.
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Thanks Thea, for stopping to read, and the nice compliments! :yay:

    Nomad

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