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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by tham, Jun 7, 2012.



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    Why for you do me this way
    What you say
    Why for you do me this way
    Why you no call
    Why no phone
    No hello
    Why for you do this
    And strike me this blow
    Why you go say that
    You say nuthin nice
    We both the same people
    We both pay the same price
    I never be knowing
    What you have in mind
    But I be knowing one thing
    I don’t like your kind


    TMH 6/6/12
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    Posted By tham | Jun 7, 2012
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hmmm - Sounds like ebonics in a way. But I'm thinking the narrator is of another ethnicity. Obviously she's waiting for THE call, THE acknowledgement, THE piece of mind which could arrest the bitterness right off of her person. Interesting read Tham. What inspired this piece?

    J.


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    Why are you doing this to me? I didn't do anything yet you treat me this way. Sounds like something I'm hearing a lot of lately...
    It would be nice to find out what caused this poem.
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    Ditto that butchiesmom -- I suppose if you know the root cause of such madness - you can at least try to stop it from happening again.... Unless that is - you're like MsJ who loves the do things over and over, hoping for a different result :roflmao:

    Okay - I suppose that is the definition of insanity. I think I'm another type of insane though hmmm...

    Hope tham happens by the thread and responds. I'm super-curious as to how this thing came about.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 24, 2012
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    this just flew out of my head, and I mean, I could not write it down fast enough.funny thing it has nothing to do with any thing. I have a young niece, and on her facebook page she has a photo on her wall to the effect of a freestyle poet, no rhyming,just like that,can you believe it,no rhyming.later that nite it just hit me,why for you do me this way, and the rest just came gushing out.she 's like ten or so, one of about 20 or so great niece's as a matter of fact.so ,no malice,just some good old rhyming to go with a great opening line.thank you for the read,,,TMH she no waiting ,no not at all,this writing just came, came right off the wall...TMH
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    Posted By tham | Oct 3, 2012
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    thanks for the read,see answer at Jacquiic's post...TMH


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    Gotcha. And gotta love it when that happens. Sounds like your niece is some sort of inspiration. I may need a dose of her to cure my writers block LOL

    J.


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