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    Live With A Passion New Member

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    I can't; it's not a choice I've made, rather something decided for me.
    Never did I choose to love you, instead I was tricked, tripped into falling over you, though you caught me before I hit the ground.
    What a terrible, horrible thing to do!
    Filling me with hope, so when you left I would crash harder than could be imagined.
    How cruel.

    Moving on isn't a choice to be made, but a twist in fate I've no control over.

    Seeing other people isn't even under consideration.
    It wouldn't be right; When I see you and my heart flutters, and although I try to keep you out, you're all that occupys my head.
    I want to be able to love fully; not just pretend to love whilst I brood over not seeing you.
    It wouldn't be fair, to them or me{maybe even you?}

    {{:gurney: }}

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    I liked this poem, it seems to have a theme thats real talking about your heart is good and you do it very easily a gift

    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    Mmm I've been there - until I finally stopped trying to lie to myself and admitted that I couldn't see other people even if I had wanted to... which of course I didn't. Hehe.
    But this piece is great! I love the way you've arranged this piece. My favourite line:

    How cruel.

    And the question at the end...

    {maybe even you?}

    Very inspired, very catchy - it sticks with you as a reader, and it adds a little something (a twist maybe) that just wraps everything up nicely. Great write :)

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Oct 24, 2006
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