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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by lanaia74, Dec 17, 2006.

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    Do I dare tamper with things I know nothing of?
    Is it right to try and contact the other side?
    See, you left me here to deal with earthly life alone, my love
    I need to talk to you and make sure you are all right since you died.

    I am so lonely and forlorn, all I want to do is cry
    I must contact you, so I may go on with my life
    Always wanting comfort in knowing why did you have to die?
    I miss you so you were my friend, my lover, my wife.

    I must find a medium to guide me to your spiritual world
    I must talk with you, my love just one more time
    We will try and contact you, we wait on communication from you to unfurl
    As we wait to hear from you, everything so silent just like a mime.

    Sitting around the table, we patiently wait for something to happen
    Across the room it seems like a white mist appears
    Hoping what I'm trying to do is not considered a sacrilege or a sin
    The mist takes a form, it speaks, but what you say is very unclear.

    I strain my ears as I try to understand what you say
    I'm filled with fright but I will not flee
    As I listen closely, I make out what you are trying to say
    Moaning and crying you say "Why did you have to kill me?"

    Posted By lanaia74 | Dec 17, 2006

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    Dear Lanaia,

    :wow:!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I think I just found another one of my favorites right here!!! I loved this storem as I call them (story and poem combined). This captured me from beginning to end. Just :wow: Unpredictable conclusion painted in gold ink. I love your dark poetry. Sometimes I read a poem from bottom to top, and when I did that, the rush was the same backward. I envisioned this as I was reading. Makes for a good painting or drawing as well. You are truly gifted my friend. Thank you for sharing, and please, please...keep'm coming!!!

    Kim ;)

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