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    I've known fairytales never become true,
    I've known it for years.
    Fairytale is a live in,
    Fairytale in which nobody cares.

    Someday i would fly away,
    away from this prison of mental pain.
    The cold hands of agony and vain.

    They said that words dont hurt,
    but believe me they do,
    Words can be so cold,
    and they could kill you.

    Someday i'd vanish myself to dust,
    Say a big goodbye if i'd must,
    If my living gives you just disgust,
    Why should i be here?

    Who was the one who looked in the mirror,
    i never recognised that girl,
    with tears falling down her cheeks,
    head full of painful screams.

    They say if someone hits you,
    turn your other cheek,
    If someone hurts you,
    never make yourself feel too bleak..

    Those warnings no one gave me,
    to see them or memorize..
    Now im no bird or fairy,
    flying through the skies..

    *If you wanna read some of my older poems, go here : http://www.freewebs.com/darknessdancer*


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Oct 22, 2006
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    Tanax Member

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    Hey, glad you found your way to this forum my dear friend :)

    The stansa I just highlighted is probably the most truest ever.
    Belive me, I know.

    I love this poem, it's so dark and cold, but still so warm and comfortable.

    Good work :)


    Posted By Tanax | Oct 22, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Yes it is a very comfortable read ME! I can certainly relate to the stanza above. All of them really...

    I do think you mean "of agony IN vain." But I think nothing really is ever IN VAIN... I think the world has a majestical way of righting its wrongs - kinda like KARMA or something...

    The last stanza was AWESOME:

    I can just think "how many times have I demanded my wings..."

    Anyway - nice writing - Welcome to the JPiC Community! If you haven't already - please introduce yourself via the Member Introductions section.

    Thanx for sharing your poem with us ;)

    JAcquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 22, 2006
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    ¤Me¤ New Member

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    Yeah, maybe it is in vain :p I dont know, maybe its just a typo :)

    And Tanax: Im glad you like it ;)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Oct 22, 2006
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    You write above the boundaries of age, Mex....and you did it here very well. Your words provoked many images we all can relate to.


    Posted By Benny | Oct 22, 2006
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    Thanks Benny ;) Im glad you like it :)


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Oct 23, 2006
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    Dear Me,

    :wow: How I let this get away is unbelievable. This is totally awesome! I apologize for being so late in reading this. :wow: Such a masterful write for your age, and any age, and is memorable. I can relate very well to most of what you scribe here. So many times, I have felt this way. These words seem to just levitate off the page and linger in my mind. Just beautiful in the way I feel the sad with the happy, feel the cold and the warmth, and etc. Great Write!!!! Thank you for sharing this.


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