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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Would you learn to somehow fly,
    pull the clouds out from the sky,
    just so you could see me?

    Would you climb the mountain tips,
    danger tumbles, falls, and slips,
    just so you would find me?

    Would you take down a small star,
    keep it in a clear glass jar,
    just so you could greet me?

    Would you face the dragons strong,
    travel though the road seems long,
    just so you could save me?

    Would you tramp the westward plains,
    run through the fast black lanes,
    just so you could catch me?

    Would you swim the oceans deep,
    fight the demons of long sleep,
    just so you could keep me?

    Would you brave the frozen fields,
    be a strong and steadfast shield,
    just so you would warm me?

    Would you let me be with you
    every moment through and through
    just so you could hold me?

    Would you keep me in your heart
    hope that we will never part
    just so I could love you?

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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    :wow: moonlightdew...excellent, beautiful, heart-warming and charming...this is an awesome love song...one can only wish to find a love so wonderful and brave and lasting.

    Thanks for posting!!

    Nomad


    run though the fast black lanes, (through?)

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    thanks for the correction!

    :yay: someone liked my writing! Other than my bf, who's supposed to like it...hehe.
    Love is good.

    Jeez Banned

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    Lets see... passport,

    Climbing gear,

    Space Ship,

    Giant blow torch,

    Sneekers for running,

    Swim trunks,

    Spare shields,

    Couple tubes of crazy glue,

    Well ' think 'm ready for
    it all now.

    :wizard: :beach:

    What a neat poem...

    everybody needs to
    find their go get...her.

    Thanks for the read.


    Posted By Jeez | Mar 10, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Great listing of the gear Jeez! funny! I never even thought of that! LOL! :respect:

    Nomad

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    hahahahaha Jeez, you make me laugh! Thanks for the read...:]
    ooh, now I have a checklist. YES :yay:

    only thing you forgot is a heart full of love :]

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    Hey MLD - It IS possible to find someone like this, I know because I DID! Hold on to those standards, girlfriend and NEVER settle for second best!
    FANTASTIC WRITE!
    - Tree.


    Posted By Altree94 | Mar 11, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    thanks so much!
    Yeah....I'm hoping I might have found the one. THen again, I'm young, I have my whole life :]
    thanks! I needed that reassurance. Teen boys = haha. soooo sooo not my poem :]

    Jeez Banned

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    Thought that you would
    know that the care was
    there...

    after getting everything
    that was needed to
    attain all you wanted.

    Oh... darn, she didn't
    even notice my efforts.
    :boohoo: :lol: :punish: :notme: :boohoo::roflmao:


    Posted By Jeez | Mar 11, 2007
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    Moonlightdew,
    Great poem.......... I love it.
    Ron


    Posted By ronbliss | Mar 11, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    AHH!!!! JEEZ!!!!

    i love you!!!!

    haha. I'm sometimes one minded....but what you said is true too....I did care...
    but thanks so much for everything...

    it's just that you could have a mind for adventure...and not because of love...


    ron..thanks so much!
    i'm glad you're not like one of those guys who think that up there is impossible :]
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    that up there might be impossible for anyone under 38 or so! hehe! :teasing:

    Nomad

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    hahahahaha

    then we all must escape to the mind and soul and uplift each other so we can do it forever together :]
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    ok, I'll start getting my gear together...oh and gotta go back to the gym too...I might look like I'm in shape, but that's all it is, looks! Back to the treadmill (grindstone!!) :shout:

    Therese

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    I hate treadmills. :p

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    Girl, I don't understand it when you say that i'm more talented than you... Honey.. you have some serious skills, and u worked them in this poem. I have often had a lot of those exact same thoughts while i was dating my ex.. and the sad part of it was.. is that he wouldn't have no matter how much he said he would. *shrugs* but it's whatever. lol the only way to do it is find somebody who will. then never let them go.. so i hope everything works out for u hun

    Jer4clarity Lover of Meanings

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    Anna,

    The thing I like best about your poem is that you put the ball in your boyfriends court. He now MUST answer your questions. Wonderful love song!

    My Fav:

    better than a star in your pocket is one you can see in a jar!

    Jer

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    Apryl...You are more talented than me in your own way!!!! xD
    And this...was written actually for my best friend....but it could be for a boyfriend too. And sad to say...it didn't happen either....we are no longer friends....he backstabbed me along with a myriad of other stuff. but that can be explained in Meaningless, the poem (in Miscellaneous). Thanks though :]
    I hope to find that boyfriend someday....

    Jer--> Thanks for reading :]
    And...yes, i'm going to give this to my next boyfriend xD
    Lol. That verse you liked was actually based on a glass jar I had given my best friend with stars in a glass jar :]
    And....but yes. This is what we want in love, isn't it?

    Intricate soul intricate soul

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    Its amazing, that no one said they would, maybe we need to ask some teen boys... NOT! Still, it is a wonderful write; dream, hope and pray. one day he will brave the alligators' trough and answer, "I will!".
    huggles chica!

    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    *huggles* thanks IS :]
    :]
    He was the one who told me he trusted me more with his life than he did with you...
    but anyway....
    Thanks for commenting *huggles* :]
    I hope to find that one someday...

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