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    petehall New Member

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    What do you want me to do
    and what do you want me to say
    why are you even here
    here to ruin my day

    your a bad smell that wont go away
    A stain thats her to stay
    You dont go away
    You dont go away

    What do I have to do
    To get you out of my head
    What is it you want me to do
    Does one of us have to be dead

    Youre a black mark next to my name
    How could you think were th same
    You dont go away
    You dont go away

    To be in the same room as you
    It pains me deep in my heart
    I dont care what happens to you
    As long as it means you depart

    Your a time Id rather forget
    Youre nothin but a goddamn regret
    You dont go away
    You dont go away


    Posted By petehall | Aug 19, 2007
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    Kit Carson JPiC Contributor

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    Yeah but what do you really think. lol? Sometimes the ones that cause us the worst pain, don't even realize it. I have certainly felt that in my life.


    Posted By Kit Carson | Aug 19, 2007
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Pete,

    You have no problem expressing it either! LOLOL What I found interesting was that it seems that the person doesn't have to be just in the same room to cause your pain. Seems like you are keeping this person in your head, and therefore feeling pain as well. Also, like Kit said, to me it reads like for this person, to continue to be around, perhaps they do not know they are hurting. Very Intense and thought-provoking here Pete, wow. Great write.

    PD :)

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    To be in the same room as you
    It pains me deep in my heart
    I dont care what happens to you
    As long as it means you depart


    nothing like the one that got away compared to the one who won't go away,
    I thought it was so funny when you laid it out there the verses you won't go away
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    DAMN!

    Hi PETE - What a poem - I bet it was therapudic to put those lines down - I know because I've written such poems before. Content is quite clear - Point of advice - Don't do things that you regret - Easier said than done eh? LOL

    But interesting poem - The lines I quoted above are easy to relate to, as I've been there.

    Thanx for the sharing ;)

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Sep 4, 2007
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    wow, not only do I feel for you. but I feel for the other person
    a. because they don't get it
    b. because they are so despised
    very powerful poem

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    was just smiling thinking of my ex while reading this lol.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Sep 6, 2007
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