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    AshleyB527 New Member

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    My body feels so weak,
    I strain to hold a single feather.
    But don't think that I'm not strong enough
    To hold myself together.

    My eyes swell up with tears,
    I see your face as just a blur.
    But don't think I can't see through you.
    I see those colors un-obscured.

    I'm so tired from my worries.
    They keep my sleep from me at night.
    But don't think I'm worried that my worries
    Will make me fall without a fight.

    You push these walls that are around me.
    They crumble down, you think I'm done.
    But don't think that it's that easy.
    Know that I will overcome.


    Posted By AshleyB527 | Apr 11, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    very good Ashley soem emphatic and strong messgaes here Ashley
    I thought you'd be good here and truth betold you are,
    lovely poem Ashley

    the first 4 lines were so strong so energetic and inspired
    making me happy theres another poet here, I hope that feeling stays

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    Hi Ashley!
    I gotta agree with Erik on this one! There is a lot of strength showing here!
    Great work, and I just LOVE that title!
    - Tree.
    :goodpost:


    Posted By Altree94 | Apr 17, 2007
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    Awesome, Ashley!! Lots of strength of character peeking through the worrywart! That's all that matters in the end...overcoming!

    You push these walls that are around me.
    They crumble down, you think I'm done.
    But don't think that it's that easy.
    Know that I will overcome.

    Loved it!!

    Nomad
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    What a beautiful message ASHLEY --- How many times I've said similar words myself - Oh! If these walls could talk. I'm pretty sure they'd speak of bones of contention as well - Interesting title for your poem... At anyrate - I just wanted to comment on the final line of your poem:

    So do I - So congrats on coming to that realization.
    It's definitely something to smile about = Thanx for sharing your poem!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 27, 2007
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