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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by JONATHAN, Oct 22, 2007.



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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    For a stranger I spoke to on the phone ... inspiration comes from weird places

    Faceless stranger
    leaving behind nothing
    except the lingering melody of your voice .

    Soft , soothing and subtle
    yet as distinct
    as the song of the wind
    that beckons the leaves to sing along to its monsoon love songs .

    Faceless stranger
    leaving behind nothing
    except the lingering melody of your voice .

    Soft , soothing and subtle
    yet as distinct
    as the cooing of the nightbirds ,
    natures serenades to secret lovers
    on their stolen night time rendezvous .

    Faceless stranger
    leaving behind nothing.....


    Posted By JONATHAN | Oct 22, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    great job Jonathan,

    I love the faceless stranger line theyre poetic brilliance
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    great way to come back to jpic ..5 star rating from a brother and a dear freind ... glad yu liked this one ... came after a long time of poetic drought ...Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Oct 22, 2007
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    Jon, this is itself a soothing piece, and a very reflective piece as well, and it lures us into that state because of the "lingering melody" and "soft, soothing, subtle" descriptions that you present to us...very peaceful piece to come back with. Great to read you again, Jon!! :yay:

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    A lovely write, Jonathan That stranger left behind some beautiful thoughts, and inspiration.


    Posted By Terence | Oct 24, 2007
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    Hey Jonathan I take it you are a customer service rep that works at a call center too?
    Me too ...... although I am the one told that my voice is as you describe. Too many tell me I have a sexy phone voice. I perhaps should have gone into the phone sex trade.......my god just think of the bucks I would be rolling in. lol and yes the dual meaning was intended :p

    Beautiful poem hon I really enjoyed this :)

    Mysty


    Posted By Mysty | Oct 31, 2007
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    I like your style, repetition usually doesn't work so well but yours flows very nicely.


    Posted By BekiLynn | Nov 12, 2007
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    First and foremost ... love yu're name Bekilynn ...sounds straight out of a Jane Austin novel ...Glad yu like my style ...Yep repetition , thats not something I do relly often but Im glad it works here ... I didnt want this poem to be mind blowing ..I wanted it soft and subtle ..like the lady on the phone ..Im glad I managed to do that ..Thank yu Beki ..Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Nov 22, 2007
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    Hey Mysty ..yu got me wondering if I could maybe call yu n listen in to ure sexy phone voice ... LOL ..glad yu liked the poem ..Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Nov 22, 2007
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    anytime Chester :)


    Posted By Mysty | Dec 9, 2007
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    dude this is righteous to the nth degree. rock on

    zaac


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    If there ever was an asshole thats me ...Im so srry for not thanking yu on time for ure lovely comments here and now that its too late for the thank yu I hav to apologise for being a prick but yu kno I love yu dontcha Therese ..Chester


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    Hey bro ..thank yu for ure comments ..Im such a big fan of ure poetry it makes me happy to know that yu liked mine ..love yu bro ...Chester


    Posted By JONATHAN | Dec 10, 2007
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