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    petehall New Member

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    You're just like a summer morning

    Youre coming on strong

    You happen with out good warning

    It doesn't take long

    I admit I kinda like ya

    you seem like lots of fun

    but when you said I love ya

    well ya coming on strong


    You're like the cold in winter

    you're makin me run

    But like a storm you hit me

    and then I'm done

    I think your kind of nice yeah

    and you know how to get your kicks

    But I have to pay the price yeah

    Cos you come on strong



    You put me at ease to quickly

    Then you come on strong

    I just dont know why you picked me

    But I wanna be gone

    I know that wed be perfect

    and i know that we'd get along

    I know we'd be so happy

    but your coming on to strong

    I said your coming on to strong


    Posted By petehall | Aug 19, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hi Peter...great beat and rhythmic flow here...the message I feel is a little confusing, but I think that's the whole gist of the poem...the "coming on too strong" is throwing off the natural progression that would otherwise occur in the relationship... Nice!!

    I know that wed be perfect
    and i know that we'd get along
    I know we'd be so happy
    but your coming on to strong


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    petehall New Member

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    Cheers. I love this site. Can you explain how I view say your work. Its all a bit confusing for a stoned english guy. Any help on viewing other poems etc would be much appreciated.


    Posted By petehall | Aug 21, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Hi Peter...hopefully it's stoned AND happy! haha! anyone's work can be viewed by clicking on their name... e.g. on the top set of links on the site, you will see Member List...this link will give you all the names of everyone who is a member, alphabetically. Click on any of their names and it will take you to their profile, from which you can click on the link called "all threads started by......whoever". Mostly, all threads started means poems posted by that person.

    Also, you can click on anyone's names in any post as well.

    Happy hunting!
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    TheBlackPoet New Member

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    i love it man!! its rare that a man want to let a woman down.. almost unheard of...., but there are some men with the courage to say what needs to be said.. and brother, you said it so well.....

    imma have to take some notes in the event i meet up with this same situation
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    I thought it was pretty innovative,

    although this is something typically a girl would say to a guy am I right?
    but hey its an experience and it was pleasant how you let her down
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    Dear Pete,

    This is a very interesting read indeed! I love the concept, and it almost reads like your feelings for her are happening without good warning, and are coming on strong, lol. But I know it is the opposite, and it also reads to feel all these things you are spending lots of time with her for her to "come on strong", soooooo who is fooling' who here. Just playin' devils advocate, lol Loved it Peter. ;)

    Kim :wub:

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    Geez Peter,
    and you too Fred, You men can get pretty cold hearted when it comes down to it.

    Nice song though, I hope my boyfriend don't start singing it .


    Posted By JolieH | Aug 23, 2007
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